Sunday, February 24, 2013

Red Wind Assignment: Entrances and Exits


My theme for this assignment was entrances and exits - or, in other words, the points in which characters enter the narrative and left the narrative (and sometimes entered again). Here are what the slides should look like:

There was only one other customer, a souse on a bar stool with his back to the door. 


A car squeaked to a stop outside and the swinging door came open. A fellow came in who looked a little in a hurry. 



[H]e hit the floor with his face. After he hit it he might have been poured concrete for all the fuss he made.



The car outside let out a roar and when I got onto the sidewalk it was flicking a red smear of taillight around the nearby corner. 



I unwound the doors and stepped out and there was a tall girl standing there waiting for the car.

                                    



I didn't know him at first. […] But I knew the gun he was holding, the .22 target automatic with the big front sight.




The girl came out through the door. She had her gun in her hand again.





He filled the doorway quickly, pushed me back into the room with a tight grin and shut the door.     


I turned and looked at a dark Cadillac coupe parked just off the loading zone. It had no lights. Light from the street touched the brightness of a woman's eyes.



Then I shut the car door and walked up the street towards Franklin.



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